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The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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the given chart shows car
journeys
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 made in a period of 9 years by
residents
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 and
non
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non-residents
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residents
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 to a European
city
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.
Overall
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, it shows a consistent decline between both
residents
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 and non-
residents
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 which is an effect caused by parking meters in
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city
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the city
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 centre and closed roads in
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city
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the city
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.
To begin
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 with, the
residents
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 used to
travel
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city
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 consistently with over 9000
journeys
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 between 4 year period of 1996 to 1999. Non-resident
travel
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journeys
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 to the
city
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 grew rapidly from 5000 to 8000
initially
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.
However
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, these
travel
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journeys
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 steeped down to 4000 over the
9 years
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9-year
 period
as a consequence
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 of the introduction of parking meters and closed roads at Westgate street and part lane to traffic, 5000
travel
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journeys
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 back for non-
residents
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 as it was back in 1996.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words journeys, residents, city, travel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Households
  • Technology adoption
  • Growth rate
  • Decline rate
  • Milestones
  • Obsolete
  • Societal factors
  • Economic conditions
  • Advancements
  • Consumer preferences
  • Market saturation
  • Trend analysis
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