The chart and graph below give the information about three categories of workers in Australia and uneployment levels within those categories.

The chart and graph below give the information about three categories of workers in Australia and uneployment levels within those categories.
The given mixed chart illustrates the information about the three different kinds of workers in
Australia
and
percentage
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the percentage
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of jobless
peoples
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people
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within those categories in the period of 10 years between 1993 and 2003.
Overall
, it could be seen that the percentage of people who
born
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were born
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in
Australia
was the highest and these other
ESC
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ESCs
and
NESC
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NESCs
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were the same.
Moreover
, the line chart wasn’t the same,
ESC
had the highest
per cent
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percentage
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and
Australia
and
NESC
was
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were
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similar. On the one hand, the chart was
showed
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shown
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that people who born in
Australia
reached the highest
points
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point
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at 76%.
Besides
, the number of
NESC
and
ESC
saw the same trends about (14%) and (10%).
On the other hand
, it can be seen that the percentage of
ESC
saw a dramatic decrease at 3%.
While
, the figure for
Australia
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Australian
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person was
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people
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generally decreased and reached nearly 3% in 2003.
In contrast
, the lowest
percent
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per cent
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was
NESC
and saw a decrease like the others from nearly 4% to 1,8%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, esc, nesc with synonyms.
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