The chart and graph below give the information about three categories of workers in Australia and uneployment levels within those categories.

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The given mixed chart illustrates the information about the three different kinds of workers in

Australia

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and

percentage

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the percentage

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of jobless

peoples

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people

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within those categories in the period of 10 years between 1993 and 2003.

Overall

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, it could be seen that the percentage of people who

born

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were born

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Australia

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was the highest and these other

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ESC

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ESCs

and

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NESC

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NESCs

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were the same.

Moreover

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, the line chart wasn’t the same,

ESC

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had the highest

per cent

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percentage

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and

Australia

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and

NESC

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was

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were

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similar. On the one hand, the chart was

showed

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shown

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that people who born in

Australia

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reached the highest

points

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point

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at 76%.

Besides

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, the number of

NESC

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and

ESC

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saw the same trends about (14%) and (10%).

On the other hand

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, it can be seen that the percentage of

ESC

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saw a dramatic decrease at 3%.

While

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, the figure for

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Australia

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Australian

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person was

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people

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generally decreased and reached nearly 3% in 2003.

In contrast

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, the lowest

percent

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per cent

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was

NESC

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and saw a decrease like the others from nearly 4% to 1,8%

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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, esc, nesc with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

167 words

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