The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
The diagram illustrates the way of
cement
making process by equipment and usage of
cement
to produce concrete for building purposes.
Overall
, the five types of equipment are used
such
as a crusher,
mixer
, rotating heater, grinder and bags,
however
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the concrete production's ingredients have
got
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tree
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three
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types of elements apart from
cement
. For
cement
production, the first stage is that limestone and clay are put into the crusher to make powder. The second stage is powder is sent into the
mixer
then
it will transfer to the rotating heater by pipe which connects the
mixer
and the rotating heater.
Third
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stage is the grinder
makes
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making
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the
cement
. The
last
process is the
cement
is packed
bags
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into bags
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. For
concrede
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concrete
production is work with gravel.
Cement
, water, sand and gravel are
pu
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put
into
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a concrede
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concrede
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concrete
mixer
to
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for
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building purposes. The gravel accounted for the most proportion at 50
percent
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per cent
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whereas
the percentage of sand is the least.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • quarrying
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • grinding
  • kiln
  • clinker
  • gypsum
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • building materials
  • limestone
  • clay
  • fine powder
  • rotating
  • cooling
  • hydration
  • aggregate
  • compression
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