In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

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Publicly smoking is
ban
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in many countries as it is not legal.
This
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essay completely
agree
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with
this
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statement because publicly smoking
effects
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other
health
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besides
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the
smoker
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and
children
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may
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on
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if adult people
smoke
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toward them.
Firstly
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, smoking not only
effect
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affect

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a
smokers
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health
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but
also
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other
peoples
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people

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besides
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him. Though a
smoker
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affected
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by many
health
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problems
but
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problem is as same as for other people indirectly.
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, a general statement we always see that smoking is injuries to
health
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. It mainly
damaged
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damages

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the lungs especially
a
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apply

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smokers
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smoker's
smokers'

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and
a
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apply

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children
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's
lung
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.
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, if anyone
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smoke
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smokes

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toward other people though it is normal for a
smoker
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and
few
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person
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people

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but
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apply

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it may
disappointed
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be disappointed
disappoint

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for
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others and many
suffers
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suffer

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from
azma
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asthma

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, oxygen problems and other diseases.
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,
children
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may
attract
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by a
smoker
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to smoking. As everyone
know
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that
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apply

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children
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reveals
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their curiosity
for
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about

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a thing very early and
attract
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soon. So , if anyone especially adults
smoke
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in front of them , they may question
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it , they
being
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intersted
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what
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thing is
it
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by
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smoking
attracted
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attracts

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the
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children
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which does not
give
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good
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a good

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impact
in
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our
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next generation.
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, if parents
smoke
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toward
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their baby , they learn it from their parents and compare it as a normal or good thing because
children
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always follow their parents. In conclusion, the decision
compare
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as
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to

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a
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good and I agree with
this
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because by
ban publicly
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banning

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smoking
children
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do
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are

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not
attract
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attracted

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in
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to

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it
besides
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smoking
effects
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affects

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everyone's
health
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Avoid Repetition
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Vocabulary Range
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Logical Progression
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Clear Standpoint
You present a clear standpoint with coherent reasoning supporting the smoking ban in public places.
Effective Examples
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Comprehensive Coverage
You effectively addressed both the health impacts and the influence on children, covering significant aspects of the topic.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • prevalence
  • respiratory issues
  • environmental pollution
  • litter
  • healthcare costs
  • smoking-induced illnesses
  • encourage smokers to quit
  • public health improvement
  • justified
  • public spaces
  • exposure
  • non-smokers
  • inconvenience
  • younger populations
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