In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

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Publicly smoking is

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in many countries as it is not legal.

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statement because publicly smoking

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smokers

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problem is as same as for other people indirectly.

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, a general statement we always see that smoking is injuries to

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smokers

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children

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soon. So , if anyone especially adults

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in front of them , they may question

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next generation.

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their baby , they learn it from their parents and compare it as a normal or good thing because

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always follow their parents. In conclusion, the decision

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smoking

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which is decreased now.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Topic Vocabulary:

secondhand smoke
prevalence
respiratory issues
environmental pollution
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healthcare costs
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public health improvement
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In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

Your opinion

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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

Students should pay the full cost for their own study, because university education benefits individuals rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?