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Robots and artificial intelligent are being developed to replace human in the workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this will have a positive or negative effect in social

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Nowadays, mechanical humanoids and synthetic
intelligence
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 are being enhanced to take over
people
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 in the
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 environment.
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 writer argues that it is important for
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 to improve
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 effectiveness and the negative side is being unemployed. It can be understood that mechanical humanoid helps
people
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 to improve the quality of
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. Nowadays in the digital era, technologies are being improved to the most modern and
robots
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 are not expected. Thanks to
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 and available materials, scientists have created
robots
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 in recent years. They did more investigation to find convenient ways to make humanoids replace humans and increase the effectiveness of
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 and the appearance of artificial
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 can
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 help humans
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 out and find more solutions.
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,
robots
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 can help
people
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 do some hard
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 and synthetic
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 helps
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 to calculate and solve
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 that should be considered is that the replacement of
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 will increase unemployment rates.
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, humans are concerned that artificial
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 will take over them in the near future, when technologies are more and more developed. It leads to some social tensions
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 as increasing in criminal rates and social evils appearing more
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 unemployment.
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,
people
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 should consider the dangerous potential that
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 and AI bring.
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, there are more negatives than positives in the long run
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 those reasons have been laid out above.
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,
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 should
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 consider the benefits sides that mechanical humanoids and synthetic
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 bring.

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Task Achievement
Try to more clearly state your position in the introduction and conclusion, ensuring consistency throughout the essay.
Task Achievement
Integrate a wider range of specific examples and data to strengthen your main points.
Coherence and Cohesion
For stronger coherence, ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs and ideas, using linking words or phrases effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider revisiting paragraph structuring to maintain a consistent flow of ideas, one main idea per paragraph, for ease of reader understanding.
General
Your essay discusses an important and relevant topic in today's technological society.
Content
You effectively outlined the potential positive and negative effects of robotics and AI in the workplace.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of your essay, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, generally follows standard academic writing guidelines.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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