Robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to repace human in the workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?

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modern places, technology devices and
robots
are being developed to work
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in the workplace. The writer
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that have
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and more serious impact on society. It is apparent that some
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can be changed by
robots
or artificial intelligence because
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the technology era. Many
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who want to help people in
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, invent a range of
robots
and electronic devices. Not only the
robots
can work accurately, but
also
the power is unlimited and the efficiency is very high .
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the details of them is very
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and
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the time .
For instance
, in Japan,
robots
can operate flexibly, working in many different harsh and dangerous environmental conditions to serve mining tasks and support production to achieve great productivity, replacing
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work. With heavier or more complex jobs to bring optimal quality and contribute significantly to the national GDP. I believe that the shift of negative changes
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robots
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capable of replicating
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human
emotions. The best artificial intelligence devices can do so far is to mimic basic facial
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and
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voice their concerns.
However
,
this
is no different from displaying an error message when there is an obstruction in their pre-programmed workflow.
According to
research on social behaviors , moral emotions that humans possess include subtle and
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complex
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complex
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such
as empathy , sympathy, and compassion, all of which contain more meanings than any other type of computer programming language In conclusion , nowadays
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robots
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an important role in the social . The writers think that the negative
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outweigh
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outweigh
the positive changes
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