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Robot and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?

#robot #intelligence #humans #workplace #impact #society
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AI and
robot
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 are now being upgraded for being used in
workplace
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instead
 of
human
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humans
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. In
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light of
this
, the author
contend
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 that
this
 phenomenon takes place
due to
 the increasing demand from the public
in
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 life quality and is a positive
changes
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 as it
promote
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 global development.
In
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 one point of view, convenience is the main point for
robot
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robots
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 and AI to be developed. In fact,
robot
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 and
Ai
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AI
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 can do things that normal
human
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 can't do and they can
done
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 the task in the most efficient way.
Moreover
,
Ai
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 and
robot
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 now
can
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communicate and
have action
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interact
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 nearly like
human
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 so they can easily understand human
command
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commands
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.
For example
, Chat GPT is the AI
that is
 produced by Open AI. It can answer user
question
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questions
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 easily with high precision.
Moreover
, Chat GPT can communicate like a real human and entertain us if we want.
In
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 the other point of view,
robot
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robots
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 and artificial intelligence bring us many
of
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benefits and positive changes, they even can help
human
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humans
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 in
house work
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housework
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 like cleaning, cooking,
ect
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etc
....
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For instance
, Panasonic have successfully created a housework
robot
name
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 Nissan. Nissan can able to cook the food that
it
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its
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 owner
want
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wants
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 or clean the floor every time the owner
hang
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hangs
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 out.
Furthermore
, Nissan is developed to
be talk
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 with
human
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 as same as Chat GPT. In conclusion, for many
reason
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 above,
i
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 believe that the positive impact of AI and
robot
 development
outweighted
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outweighs
 the negative.
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