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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150
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The chart
compare
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 the frequency of the proportion of locals who ate in
the
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apply
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fast
food
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 restaurants in 2003 2006 and 2013.
It is clear that
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 the number of people who ate fast
food
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 once a week was the most in 2003 and 2006,
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however
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however,
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 the figure of who ate once or twice a month became the most
one
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in 2013. The people ate fast
food
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everyday
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 and the people
never
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who never
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 ate fast
food
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were stay
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 at a stable level during
this
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 period. The percentage of the consumers who had meals at fast
food
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restaurant
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restaurants
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 once a week increased from around 31% to 33% between 2003 and 2006.
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However
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 there was a decrease to 27% in 2013.
By contrast
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 the figure of those who enjoyed
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food
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the food
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 in fast
food
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restaurant
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restaurants
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 once or twice a month
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firstly
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reduce
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 to 25% from 30% in the period between 2003 and 2006 but it became the highest one in 2013 which is 33%. For the residents who ate in fast
food
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restaurant
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restaurants
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 many times a week, the proportion stayed lower than 20% during the period. And the number of “ a few times a year “ had a sightly risen to 15% and stayed at a stable level. The proportion of those who eat at fast
food
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restaurant
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restaurants
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everyday
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every day
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 and never had a negligible amount of
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, restaurant with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • dining frequency
  • decade overview
  • trend analysis
  • to dine out
  • fluctuation
  • sharp increase
  • gradual decline
  • eating habits
  • statistical comparison
  • consuming pattern
  • noteworthy change
  • anomaly
  • periodic comparison
  • data interpretation
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