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Many students find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school. What are the reasons? What could be done to solve this problem?

#students #attention #school
Nowadays,several
students
 struggle to focus during class or lose their passion for
education
. Mainly, that occurs because of two reasons: weakness in the content of studying materials and the unavailability of interesting activities in school.
This
 essay will highlight the reasons for
this
 situation and suggest some practical solutions that might increase the desire for
education
 in
students
.
Firstly
, difficulty concentrating during class refers to a decrease in the attractive topics in the studying materials;
therefore
, the content of the subjects only includes scientific information; it does not contain different social topics or interesting experiences.
Secondly
, most schools give priority to
education
 and do not give the same support to other activities
such
 as sports,art,and cooking. To illustrate,the
students
 spend longer hours in class than time in activities.  It is suggested that the
education
 governments modify the content of subject material by adding topics and experiences that are interesting for the young generation.
In addition
, the design of the books, including pictures and
colors
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, plays a significant role in attracting
students
.
In other words
,the schools should encourage the
students
 to improve their hobbies and obtain many skills by creating a suitable environment and providing all the requirements and tools needed.
To sum up
,we could say that
students
 spend long hours in school;
therefore
, they should receive a
high quality
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of
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education
 and improve their personalities at the same time.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentration
  • attention span
  • distractions
  • technology
  • boredom
  • tiredness
  • engagement
  • learning disabilities
  • teaching techniques
  • classroom size
  • family issues
  • health problems
  • motivational strategies
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