The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Write 150 words.
The line chart provides key information about the gym
membership
of both human's
gender from the years Change noun form
human
of
1980 to 2010. Change preposition
apply
Overall
, it can be seen that most of the time, the membership
of men was higher than that of women. In addition
, the males' membership
was above the females in the beginning, whereas
, it was the opposite by the end of the period.
According to
what is shown, men
Change noun form
men's
membership
began, at about 2000, in 1980, and it rose sharply to less than 4000 by 1985. Afterward
, it declined dramatically to about 1500, in 1995. Following that, it jumped to around 5000 by 2005, Change the spelling
Afterwards
then
dropped swiftly to less than 1000.
In terms of female membership
, it started, at approximately 1000, in 1980. Even though it increased gradually, it experienced fluctuations over the years and reached a peak of about 2800, in 1995 and 2005. Finally
, it dropped gradually to less than 2000, in 2010.Submitted by sm710129 on
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