The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Write 150 words.

The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Write 150 words.
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The line chart provides key information about the gym
membership
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of both
human's
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human
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gender from the years
of
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apply
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1980 to 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that most of the time, the
membership
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of men was higher than that of women.
In addition
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, the males'
membership
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was above the females in the beginning,
whereas
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, it was the opposite by the end of the period.
According to
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what is shown,
men
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membership
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began, at about 2000, in 1980, and it rose sharply to less than 4000 by 1985.
Afterward
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, it declined dramatically to about 1500, in 1995. Following that, it jumped to around 5000 by 2005,
then
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dropped swiftly to less than 1000. In terms of female
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, it started, at approximately 1000, in 1980. Even though it increased gradually, it experienced fluctuations over the years and reached a peak of about 2800, in 1995 and 2005.
Finally
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, it dropped gradually to less than 2000, in 2010.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words membership with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Spike
  • Steady increase
  • Decline
  • Plateau
  • Peak
  • Surge
  • Membership uptake
  • Gender disparity
  • Health consciousness
  • Fitness regimes
  • Societal norms
  • Technological advancements
  • Demographic shift
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