Many food and drink prodcuts contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary Products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
There are massive
products
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contain
high-level of Correct pronoun usage
that contain
sugars
, and these Fix the agreement mistake
sugar
products
should be more Use synonyms
pricy
because Correct word choice
expensive
it
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they
arises
health issues, Verb problem
cause
as a result
, Linking Words
its
usage will decrease. Correct pronoun usage
their
This
essay essay will delve into why Linking Words
sugar
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products
should be expensive, Use synonyms
along with
related examples.
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Firstly
, there are many health issues caused by cheaper and unhealthy Linking Words
products
which usually contain high Use synonyms
level
of Fix the agreement mistake
levels
sugar
. If sugary Use synonyms
products
are expensive, Use synonyms
people
generally will not buy them. Use synonyms
This
is because the price Linking Words
is often change
customer behaviour, especially if it is expensive. Change the verb form
often changes
For example
, in Mongolia, fruits are expensive, apparently, not everyone Linking Words
cannot
afford them. Rephrase
can
Instead
of that most Linking Words
people
consume fried dough which contains too much Use synonyms
sugar
.
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Secondly
, Linking Words
majority
of Correct article usage
the majority
people
do not know about the drawbacks of using too Use synonyms
much
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many
sweety
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sweet
products
. Use synonyms
This
is because high-level Linking Words
sugar
can lead to addiction, Use synonyms
such
as craving more and more Linking Words
sugar
when human organs eat Use synonyms
sugar
. If individuals had Use synonyms
well
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been well
awared
Correct your spelling
aware
about
it, most Change preposition
of
people
would not have Use synonyms
comsumed
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consumed
comsumed
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consumed
consumer
products
. Use synonyms
For instance
, Linking Words
young
generation has Add an article
the young
becoming
well understood the nutrition facts, as it is one part of Change the verb form
become
subject
in the Add an article
the subject
secandary
school. Correct your spelling
secondary
Consequently
, Linking Words
youth
generation Correct article usage
the youth
likely
to care Add a missing verb
is likely
their
Change preposition
about their
healthy
being and fitness rather than Replace the word
health
previous
generation.
Add an article
the previous
To conclude
, sugary Linking Words
products
should be expensive, so that customer behaviour will change easily. Many Use synonyms
people
do not know about Use synonyms
negative
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the negative
effect
of consuming high-level Fix the agreement mistake
effects
sugar
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,
so that increase awareness would be one of the important Remove the comma
apply
approach
, which has already Fix the agreement mistake
approaches
perceived
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been perceived
within
the youths because Change preposition
by
of
secondary school started to teach Change preposition
apply
this
concept.Linking Words
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