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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
#proportion #population #three #countries
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the Percentage
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 of People aged 65 and over from
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the Period
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of
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1940 and
also
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highest
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the highest
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 Proportion of elder People followed by Sweden and
USA
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the USA
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 as Per
datas
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data
 Japan had the lowest Population
by
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57 in 1940 as compared with Sweden
as well as
USA
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the USA
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. During the period of 1960 to 1990, were that stage Where Proportion of elder
individual
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individuals
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 reached
at
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3% and
remain
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remained
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 Stable till 1990.
However
, after
that
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 it
Started
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started
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 growing gradually and
then
 escalated to 10% in 2023.
According to
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the chart
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, Japan will have
dramatically
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 rise in 2040 and it will sharply reach
at
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28% which will be
highest
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the highest
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arnong
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among
 all countries. Meanwhile,
USA
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the USA
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 and
sweden
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Sweden
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 were the countries which had
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a Percentage
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 below 10% of aged 65 and over
individual
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individuals
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. Both the nations showed
upward
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an upward
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 trend and
it
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they
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 will have above.. 20% of
elder
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elderly
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 People in 2040.
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