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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given live graph demonstrates average monthly temperatures,
where as
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whereas
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 the
tablechart
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table chart
 illustrates
total
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the total
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 annual hours of sunshine for
London
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, New
York
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 and
Sydney
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.
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,
total
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a total
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 number of hours of sunshine per year in
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london
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London
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 is much less than half of New
York
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 and
sydeny
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Sydney
.
Sydney
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 has much
hot
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hotter
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temperature
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 compared to both the other cities →
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 with, in January,
Sydney
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 has the hottest
temperature
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 more than 25
°C
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,
while
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london
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London
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 and New
York
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 have less than 10°Cand 5
°C
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temperature
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 respectively .Afterward of January,
Sydney
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's
temperature
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begin
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 to drop down till July and
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london's
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London's
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 and New
York
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's
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temperature
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temperatures
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start
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started
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 to rise till August and July.
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, in July, New
York
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become
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became
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 the hottest town with approximately 30
°C
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 compared to
other
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the other
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 two cities. Following these, the
temperature
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 of
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sydney
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Sydney
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begin
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begins
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 to
rose
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rise
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 after July to 25
°C
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 in December.
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, New
York
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's
temperature
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 decreases to 5
°C
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at
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in
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 the
last
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 month of the year
as well as
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 there is
also
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decrease
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a decrease
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 in the
temperature
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 of
London
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 from August to almost 10
°C
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 in December. Discussing the table chart, the total annual hours of sunshine in New
York
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 and
Sydney
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 are 2,535 and 2, 473 and in
London
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. it is 1,180 which is less than half of other towns.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, york, sydney, temperature, °c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
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