The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
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The pie charts compare the average online
sales
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for retail sectors in New
Zealand
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in 2003 and 2013.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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in 2003 the largest online
sales
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were in the travel sector.
However
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,in 2013 it was
film
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and
music
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.
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in 2003, the lowest online
sales
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In New
Zealand
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were
film
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or
music
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.
On the contrary
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in 2013,it was clothes. As the pie charts show, in 2003, the highest online
sales
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were in travel at 36% in New
Zealand
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among
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all retail sectors.
In contrast
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, the lowest figure in online
sales
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was the books sector at 19% in New
Zealand
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.
Additionally
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,the rate of clothes and
film
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or
music
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were almost the same. Regarding 2013 online
sales
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, the largest was
film
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or
music
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at 33% in New
Zealand
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.
However
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, the smallest retail sector was clothes at 16% in New
Zealand
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.Meanwhile , the rates of travel and books were at 29% and 22% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, zealand, film, music with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • E-commerce
  • Retail sectors
  • Growth rate
  • Decade
  • Decline
  • Trends
  • Online transactions
  • Consumer behavior
  • Market share
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Digital era
  • Accessibility
  • User-friendly platform
  • Market dynamics
  • Predictive outlook
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