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The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainme Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainme Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
A glance at the table provides the percentage of monthly family expenditures in four sectors including food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment in
five
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 European countries which are France, Germany, the UK,Turkey and Spain.
Overall
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, the vast majority of the
families
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 in the
five
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 countries spend the most on housing whilst
families
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 in Turkey and Spain spend the most on food and drink.
According to
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 the information shown in the table, food and drink cost 28% of monthly household income in Turkey which is the highest among the
five
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 areas.As
fon
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for
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 the costs of housing, British
families
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 spend 37% of their monthly family income on it which is twofold that Spanish
families
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 spend on it by 18%.
On the other hand
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, the expenses of clothing only
takes
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take
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 7% of French monthly household
fundings
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funding
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 which is the lowest. What should be particularly
mentoned
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mentioned
 is that
families
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 in Germany spend 19% of their family monthly
fundings
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funding
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 on entertainment which is the highest in the
five
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 countries and even 9% higher them that of Turkish
families
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 expenditure on it.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words five, families with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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