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The map shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The map shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The given map illustrates the improvement of the village of Rye
mouth
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Mouth
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 between 1995 and
present
Correct article usage
the present
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.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that there is no big change
througout
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throughout
 the period,
while
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 there is an additional branch street and the
farmland
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 and forest
park
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 now
is being replace
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is being replaced
is replacing
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 with
golf
Correct article usage
a golf
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 field and tennis court. In 1995, there was
fishing
Correct article usage
a fishing
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 port southern of the village at the sea, which
it
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apply
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actually included
fish
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a fish
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 market right on the coast. Across the fish market, there was
shop
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a shop
the shop
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, and to the east of
both
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both,
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 there was
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a conjuction
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conjuction
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conjunction
, which placed
hotel
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a hotel
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 right at the intersection, leading to the main street of the village.
Cafe
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The cafe
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 was placed across the hotel, still on the beach area. Eastern of the main road, there was
forest
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a forest
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park
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 and
farmland
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,
while
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 housing was mainly located the opposite of the road. There were
also
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 several
house
Change to a plural noun
houses
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 that
built
Add a missing verb
were built
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 near the
farmland
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, but actually on the edge of the main street. Regarding present developments, the fishing port is erased and the fish market is being replaced with apartments, following the shop center that now functions as
Correct article usage
a restaurants
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restaurants
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restaurant
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. There is
also
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reduction
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a reduction
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for
Change preposition
in
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 the greenery
,
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apply
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 since the
farmland
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 and forest
park
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 replaced with
golf
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a golf
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 field and tennis court.
Moreover
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, the hotel now has
it
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its
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 own car
park
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, and the housing is extended to the new branches road.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words farmland, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • transformation
  • residential areas
  • infrastructure
  • connectivity
  • commercial development
  • public services
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • economic growth
  • lifestyle changes
  • quality of life
  • sustainability
  • layout
  • connectivity
  • impact
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