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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change n each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change n each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar chart compares a particular country's income from exports in several categories between two years, 2015 and 2016,
whereas
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 the table adds information about the percentage difference in each category. The categories are
petroleum
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products
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, engineered
goods
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,
gems
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 and
jewellery
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, agricultural
products
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, and
textiles
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.
Overall
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,
textiles
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, engineered
goods
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,
petroleum
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products
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, and agricultural
products
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 brought higher export income to the country in 2016.
On the contrary
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,
gems
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 and
jewellery
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 experienced a slight drop during the period.
To begin
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 with,
textiles
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, engineered
goods
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, and
petroleum
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products
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 both faced a notable increase from 2015 to 2016. The
textiles
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' surge was 15.24%, starting with over 25
billion
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 to approximately 33
billion
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, followed by engineered
goods
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 the most valuable exports that went up from around 58
billion
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 to about 33
billion
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 in 2016 (8.5% growth).
However
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,
petroleum
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products
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 showed less increment with only 3% higher in 2016. The only category that witnessed a decline was the
gems
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 and
jewellery
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.
While
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 the amount is still categorized as the top three most beneficial export sectors, it had a 5.18% decrease. To be more detailed, the
gems
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 and
jewellery
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 export income was 45
billion
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 worth in 2015,
then
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 it fell to 40
billion
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 in 2016.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words petroleum, products, goods, gems, jewellery, textiles, billion with synonyms.
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