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The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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table
depicts
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 the figures for fresh
fish
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 from local and overseas sources in a city in Australia, called Perth, between 2004 and 2014. The values are shown in metric
tons
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.
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, the
amount
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 of total
fish
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 presented an increase until 2009, when it decreased to the same level in 2006/2007. The source of
fish
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 from local suppliers presented similar behaviour to the total
amount
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,
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, the peak occurred one year early reaching 8,136 metric
tons
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. Imported
fish
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 had a different trend, because it increased until 2012, reaching the maximum of 1,227 metric
tons
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, when it presented a slight fall. On average, the
amount
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 of imported
fish
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 was less than 15%
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of the total.
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, in 2014, local catches provided 5,319
tons
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while
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 other countries provided only 782.7
tons
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. It is possible
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 that
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 town produced the majority
amount
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 of
fish
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 that was consumed in
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 ten-year period, but imported
fish
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 increased more than national
fish
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, tons, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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