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The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK from 2000 to 2008 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK from 2000 to 2008 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the total of
the
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UK migrated
people
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 during 2000 - 2008/ from 2000 to 2008 and the pie chart depicts the reason they moved to the UK in 2008.
Overall
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, there were no remarkable differences in the
number
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 of
immigrants
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 except the under
2 year
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 category. Noticeably,
while
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 the total
number
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 of
people
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 staying under 2
years
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 was the highest, studying and working were the dominant purposes for migration in 2008. In 2000, the groups of
immigrants
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 who stayed up to 2
years
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 and at least 4
years
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 shared the same level at 150, which was 3 times more than another. From 2001 to 2004, the figure of
immigrants
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 living up to 2
years
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 witnessed a significant increase to 250, and became the highest,
then
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 stabilized at
this
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 level until the end of the observed time.
In contrast
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, minimal changes were seen in the
number
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 of
people
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 who lived from 2 to 4
years
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 during the first 6
years
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.
Although
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this
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 figure exhibited a continuous increase during the following
years
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 to reach 100, which was double, in 2008, it was still the lowest. Strikingly, the
number
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 of
immigrants
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 staying in 4 or more
years
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 maintained at 150 over the 8-year period. Accounting for 38%, immigration for work was the most popular reason, followed by 32% of
people
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 coming for study. These
reasons
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 accounted for the majority, with 70%, 54% higher than the percentages of accompany and family reunited
reasons
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.
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, there was a similarity in the rates of other
reasons
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 and none
reasons
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 at 7%, which was the lowest.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, number, immigrants, years, reasons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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