In the past most working people had only one job, however nowadays more and more people have more than one job at the same time. What are the reasons for this development? What are the advantages and disadvantages of having more than one job?
Most people today are working in multiple
jobs
all over the world compared to the past era because they mainly need to get more money or gain more skills. Use synonyms
However
, working a second job has positive and negative impacts.
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To begin
, many individuals are choosing to work two Linking Words
jobs
for many reasons. The primary reason is boosting their bank accounts or incomes to cope with Use synonyms
rising
cost of living. Which is becoming high and varies all over the world. Where the present lifestyle is more complex than in the past. Add an article
the rising
Then
the present Linking Words
industrial based
economy changes the concept of Add a hyphen
industrial-based
life
standards, Use synonyms
such
as education, Linking Words
houses’
styles, clothes and food. Change noun form
houses
As a result
, those living Linking Words
standards
costs become high Change the noun form
standard
according to
the rapid economic changes. Linking Words
In addition
, some people become jobholders to enhance their resumes because future employers will take note of multiple Linking Words
jobs
on their resumes.
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, working extra Correct your spelling
Moreover
jobs
has pros and cons. On the one hand, it enhances income. So it's an awesome way to get more money to satisfy all Use synonyms
life
aspectsUse synonyms
,
or provide financial security. Remove the comma
apply
Besides
, engaging in an aside job expands the professional network. Linking Words
Also
, it contributes to a sense of stability when the worker feels mental well-being. Linking Words
On the other hand
, working two Linking Words
jobs
means constant pressure, which leads to exhaustion, lack of enough ordered sleep, and increased risk of stress. Use synonyms
As a consequence
,it can Linking Words
have
serious health issues. Ultimately, working more than one job eats into leisure time, Verb problem
cause
as well as
leaves little room for personal Linking Words
life
, social Use synonyms
life
, and hobbies.
In conclusion, holding extra employment is a way to improve living and supply Use synonyms
the
incomes. Correct article usage
apply
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also
It helps in developing skills,mental well-being, and experiences. But, it leads to less self-care and a healthy lifestyle Add a comma
also,
due to
time constraints.Linking Words
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Eloquent discussion of the reasons behind multiple job holdings, including the need for more income and enhanced resumes.
Content
Comprehensive coverage of the pros and cons of having more than one job, presenting a balanced view.
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