The graphs below illustrate the gadgets individuals in the 18 to 25 age categories utilized to watch TV channels in Canada in 2009 and 2019.

The graphs below illustrate the gadgets individuals in the 18 to 25 age categories utilized to watch TV channels in Canada in 2009 and 2019.
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the diagram illustrates how much
people
in 18 to 25 age used different devices to watch television in Canada in 2009 and 2019. , there was a decreased use of conventional
TV
, laptops, and desktop computers to watch
TV
with conventional
TV
witnessing the most dramatic decline.
While
in
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mobile phones, flat-screen TVs, and tablets were seen an increase with mobile phones was the most remarkable. The number of
people
using Conventional
TV
started at 34% in 2009, after which only occupied 4% in total in 2019.
Similarly
, but by smaller degrees, The figures for desktop computers and laptops were at 18% and 20% respectively, followed by a drop to the same at 12% in 2019. there was only 8% of
people
who used mobile phones to watch television in 2009, with a subsequent significant thrive to 27% in 2019.
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5% and 15% of
people
aged 18 to 25 chose tablet and flat-screen
TV
in order to watch television, which later went up to 19% and 25% respectively in 2019.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, tv with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrate
  • gadgets
  • utilized
  • age categories
  • watching TV channels
  • comparison
  • popularity
  • notable trends
  • increase/decrease
  • devices
  • decade
  • advancements in technology
  • user preferences
  • speculation
  • future trends
  • conclusion
  • implications
  • technology and media companies
  • lifestyle
  • habits
  • target age group
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