The table and charts below provide information about the destinations and employment of UK first degree holders. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the percent
percent
of graduates working in four Change the spelling
per cent
diffrent
employment types during 4 years. Correct your spelling
different
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,
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amount
of payments Add an article
the amount
of
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for
two
genders in 2009 and 2010.
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the two
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show
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shows
graduate
students have Add an article
the graduate
full time
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full-time
carrers
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careers
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information
in the pie charts more than half of Correct article usage
the information
people
earn between 15000 and 25000.
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the people
To begin
almost 60 percent
have Change the spelling
per cent
full time
jobs and its Add a hyphen
full-time
percent
has a little fluctuation Change the spelling
per cent
during
4 years. Change preposition
over
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, Correct your spelling
Furthermore
percent
of Correct your spelling
the percentage
part time
jobs Add a hyphen
part-time
deacreasing
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decreased
overally
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overall
about
2 Change preposition
by about
percent
. While
students that attend more studies were level off about 17 percent
but not Change the spelling
per cent
employeed
ones rises until 2009 Correct your spelling
employed
then
it falls down.
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an important result could be that women Add a comma
chart,
eran
less than Correct your spelling
earn
men
. In spite of
, 4 Correct pronoun usage
of this
percent
of men
take more than 35000 only 2 percent
of women have such
salaries. Although
females had bigger
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a bigger
percent
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percentage
in
low payments Change preposition
of
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15000. but in salaries between 15000 to 20000 both sexes have Correct your spelling
under
same
quotes and females have more Correct article usage
the same
percent
in payments between 20000 and 25000
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per cent
a
little Correct article usage
apply
diffrence bettween
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difference between
men
and women whereas
men
in most parts had the upper hand and table
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show
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