The table and charts below provide information about the destinations and employment of UK first degree holders. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below provide information about the destinations and employment of UK first degree holders. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table and charts below provide information about the destinations and employment of UK first degree holders. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table
chart
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presents
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the percent
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percent
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per cent

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of graduates working in four
diffrent
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different

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employment types during 4 years.
While
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,
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apply

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the pie charts demonstrate
amount
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the amount

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of payments
of
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for

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two
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the two

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genders in 2009 and 2010.
Totally
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The total

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table
chart
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show
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shows

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that most of
graduate
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the graduate

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students have
full time
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full-time

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carrers
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careers
carers

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and based on
information
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the information

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in the pie charts more than half of
people
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the people

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earn between 15000 and 25000.
To begin
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almost 60
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percent
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per cent

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have
full time
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full-time

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jobs and its
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percent
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per cent

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has a little fluctuation
during
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over

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4 years.
Furthemore
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Furthermore

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,
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percent
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the percentage

The word percent doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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of
part time
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part-time

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jobs
deacreasing
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decreased

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overally
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overall

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about
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by about

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2
percent
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.
While
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students that attend more studies were level off about 17
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Use synonyms

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percent
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per cent

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but not
employeed
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employed

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ones rises until 2009
then
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it falls down. In comparison of two pie
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Use synonyms

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chart
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chart,

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an important result could be that women
eran
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earn

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less than
men
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. In spite
of
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of this

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, 4
percent
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of
men
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take more than 35000 only 2
percent
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of women have
such
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salaries.
Although
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females had
bigger
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a bigger

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Use synonyms

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percent
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percentage

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in
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of

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low payments
uunder
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under

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15000. but in salaries between 15000 to 20000 both sexes have
same
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the same

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quotes and females have more
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Use synonyms

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percent
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per cent

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in payments between 20000 and 25000 In short, there is
a
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apply

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little
diffrence bettween
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difference between

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men
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and women
whereas
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men
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in most parts had the upper hand and
table
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the table

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chart
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show
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shows

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that most
of
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apply

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academic graduates had full-time jobs.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, percent, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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