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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Various languages
are disappears
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 every year. Some
people
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 think that it is not necessary because if there are a bit
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of languages
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languages
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language
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, we will understand easily communication. I strongly agree with
this
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a
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life will be easier if
people
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 use a similar
language
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 and my reason will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
Body · 1
It is undeniable that the world has copious languages
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for
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to
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for
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conversation
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 in a different country because it
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is
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depened
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depend
depended
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inhabitants
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inhabitant
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inhabitants
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 which are distinct
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apply
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a
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nations
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national
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 but many countries have a common
language
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is
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English
language
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 to
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be
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comunicate
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communicate
communicated
 with other
people
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.
Thus
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, the
language
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was
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died out
that
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which
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mean
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meant
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 many
people
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 did not
knowed
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know
 and
used
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use
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in
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it in
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the
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daily life.
Body · 2
In addition
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, if
disappearing
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disappears
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 of tongues and everyone
choose
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chooses
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 to use the same
language
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, it may
as a result
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 in
the
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easier
in
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apply
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a
traveling
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travel
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.
For example
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, when
people
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are
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travel
in
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overseas and speak a common
language
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as a result
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 of
people
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in
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a
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the
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 same meaning and they will travel more
easier
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easily
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 to protect
a
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against a
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losting
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loss
 in
the other
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another
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 country.
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,
people
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be make
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a
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new
friend
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friends
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from
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with
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the
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foreigner and
it
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they
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 have
vasatile
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versatile
 in
a
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business which
enable
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enables
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them in
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in
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to
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connection
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connect
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.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I think if we use
a
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one
tongues
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tongue
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, it will
make
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have
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 a lot of
possitive
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positive
effect
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effects
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in
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on
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 our
life
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lives
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 and
a
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language
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communication and have
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 expanded society.

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structure
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cohesion
To improve coherence, sharpen transitions between paragraphs and ideas using phrases like 'Furthermore', 'In addition', or 'On the other hand'.
vocabulary
Aim for more precise and varied vocabulary to articulate your points. Use a thesaurus if necessary, but ensure the words fit naturally within your context.
grammar
Be mindful of using correct verb tenses consistently ('disappear' instead of 'disappears' for general statements).
proofreading
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content
Your essay addresses both sides of the argument, providing a balanced viewpoint.
engagement
Engagement with the topic and clear personal stance help convey your arguments effectively.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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