The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates data about the
number of
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percentage of the
population
in four
asian
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Asian
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countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020
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then
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for 2030 and 2040.
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,what stands out from the graph is that there were
dramatically
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upward trends in the percentage of the
populatin
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population
of both
indonesia
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Indonesia
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and
malaysia
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Malaysia
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,
while
the
populatin
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population
of
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the philippines
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philippines
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Philippines
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and
thailand
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Thailand
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saw a strikingly upward the period in question. Another interesting point is that
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the malaysia
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malaysia
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Malaysia
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population
will rise more than others.
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at the details, as regards
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the population
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cities of
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the philippines
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philippines
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Philippines
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and
thailand
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started at around 30% and 19% respectively in1970,
then
there
were
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a
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imarginally
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marginally
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to under 50 % and 27% respectively in1990
then
there was a fluctuation over the next 30 years at which point it will increase at just 50% and around 40% respectively until2040,if we look at
population
cities of
indonesia
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Indonesia
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and
malaysia
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Malaysia
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started at 12% and 30% respectively in1970 .
then
there
were rapidly went
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up to 49% and70% in 2020 and we see there will
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sharply to 55% and 80% in 2040.
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