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The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how many
people
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 contact the Tourist Information Office in a town to get information, whether by meeting in person, sending letters, or simply calling
this
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 office, in a six-
month
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 period of time from January to June in the year 2011.
Overall
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, it is inevitable from the data that individuals were
firstly
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 interested in speaking to
this
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 office through their phones until April,
however
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, after that the results changed as many of them got interested in meeting in person.
To begin
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 with the first
month
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 of
this
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 year, almost 1000
people
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 got information through calling
this
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 company and getting informed.
This
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 data went through some changes and dropped down a
month
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 after that,
although
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 it experienced an upward trend afterwards in March. The results remained steady from
this
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month
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 and a
month
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 after that,
as well as
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finally
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 rising and reaching the number of 1600.
This
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 was the exact time when the plot twisted as
people
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 tended to visit the place themselves to have face-to-face communication.
While
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 the in-person data was the lowest at the beginning of the year, it went through significant growth and eventually reached the maximum result of almost 2000 individuals visiting them on a daily basis.
On the other hand
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, notions were not interested in having communication by letters. Fewer than 800
people
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 tended to use
this
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 method in January,
nevertheless
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,
this
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 experienced a downward trend and by the end of six months, less than 400 nations were reaching through them by letters.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, month with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • Overall trend
  • Sharp increase
  • Gradual decline
  • Peak
  • Fluctuation
  • Outnumbered
  • Dominated
  • In-person inquiries
  • By telephone
  • By letter/email
  • Correspondence
  • Interpersonal
  • Communication method
  • Popularity
  • Comparison
  • Tourism season
  • Visitor engagement
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