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the chart below shows the average age of men and women who retired from work in 7 countries in 2004 and 2008.

the chart below shows the average age of men and women who retired from work in 7 countries in 2004 and 2008.
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The given bar chart presents two bar graphs delineating the average
retirement
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age
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 of
men
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 and
women
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 across seven different countries in 2004 and 2008. Upon analysis, there was a general upward trend in the average
retirement
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age
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 for both genders in the majority of countries, with the exception of Italy, where the
retirement
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age
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 for
men
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 remained stagnant but decreased for
women
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. Sweden exhibited the highest
retirement
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age
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 for both sexes,
while
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 Italy displayed the lowest. For
men
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, Sweden showed the highest
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 at which they were still working until they got 62.5, in both 2004 and 2008, increasing from 63 to 63.7 over the specified period. The Netherlands, the UK, and Germany
initially
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 reported slightly lower eligible ages for
retirement
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 of 62, 61, and 60, respectively, in 2004, all of which
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 demonstrated upsurges by 2008, reaching 62, 61.8, and 61. Denmark and France began with end-of-service ages of 59 and 58.6 IN TURN, with Denmark rising to 60 and France rising to 59.
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, Italy had the lowest
retirement
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age
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 for
men
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 at 58, remaining unchanged throughout the observation period. For
women
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, Sweden, the Netherlands, the UK, and Germany all witnessed an increase in the
age
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 of cessation of employment from 2004 to 2008, reaching 62.5, 62, 60.5, and 60, respectively. Denmark and France
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 experienced a
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rise
 from 58 and 57.3 in 2004 to 58.6 and 58 in 2008. Notably, Italy emerged as the sole outlier, with the
retirement
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age
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 for
women
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 decreasing from 57 to 56 during the same period.
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