The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.
The plan displays the centre of Paris, where the company intends to organize a new facility on both different sides of the river.
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, there is a river that located in the centre of Paris. There are two sides: the Left Bank side and the Right waterfront.
We have the main facility of Paris: Eiffel Tower, on the Left beach. Other facilities including the Art Gallery (which is visited by 750 people a day), the sport centre (with total 500 visitors per day), and the Bir-Hakeim metro station there too. Particular entertainments are visited with lot of visitors. The company is going to construct a new eating place and the second spot of a dining place in the Left side of the river. Moreover
, there are the Bir-Hakeim bridge, the Lena overpass, and the Debilly Footbridge which can help to get to the other side.
There are the Aquarium, the Maritime Museum, and the park on the Right coast. The Maritime Museum has 8000 tourists, meanwhile the Aquarium has only 2000 each day. Therefore
, the company is going to build the first spot of the cafeteria there.Submitted by akzharkynzhamal on
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