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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates a comparative scrutiny
over
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 the arrival of international tourists
accross
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across
 five different countries to a particular destination from 1995 to 2010. It can be seen that the US and France had the by far the most foreign
travelers
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travellers
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,
whereas
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 Brazil and Egypt had the lowest proportion,
although
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 in all countries the
number
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 generally went up.
Initially
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, the
number
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 of overseas tourists that had reached the United States already hit at around 70
million
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 people, marking it as
the
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 popular destination compared to other nations. The proportion progressively increased with the peak reached at around 90
million
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 tourists in 2005, just before dwindled to 80
million
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at the end
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 of the period.
On the other hand
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, Paris, which eventually shared
the
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 similar
number
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 of overseas arrivals with the previous country, commenced from 30
million
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 people, and within the next five
years
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years,
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 the
number
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 doubled to 60
million
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,
indiciating
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indicating
 an influx of
tourist
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tourists
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. Another country
such
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 as Malaysia, experienced a culminating trend from 20
million
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of
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visitors to nearly 50
million
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, with a small dip in 2005. Unlike the others, Brazil and Egypt went through a similar gradual trend throughout the given period, starting at the same proportion of less than 10
million
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 international visitors who arrived in those countries, the
number
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 successfully reached
more
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almost 20
million
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 by 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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