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The pie charts and table give information about the total and sources of fish imported to the US between 1998 and 2000.

The pie charts and table give information about the total and sources of fish imported to the US between 1998 and 2000.
The pie charts and table below illustrate the percentage of imported fish to the United
State
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 from three different sources between 1988 and 2000
as well as
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 the total income
that
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apply
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measured
by
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in
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dollars
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.
Overall
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, the highest proportion of fish was imported by Canada,
while
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 China's importation accounted for the least
the
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in the
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 first years. There was
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 in the others's
import
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imports
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. it began at 27% in 1988
then
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 it reached
at
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apply
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the
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a
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 peak
46
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of 46
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% before
went
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 down
at
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to
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 42% in the
last
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year
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. The total value from import has been increased
year
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 by
year
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. it had 6.57
dollars
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 in 1988
then
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 went up by around 2
dollars
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 given the period and it reached 10.72
dollars
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 by the
last
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year
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To conclude
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, fish import sources of Canada
was
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decreased
whereas
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 China's importation
was
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increased whole the given period of time.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • import volume
  • consumption patterns
  • regulations
  • international trade agreements
  • prevailing trends
  • significant increase/decrease
  • imports
  • exports
  • data presentation
  • visual aids
  • highlight
  • sources
  • contributors
  • notable trends
  • speculation
  • shifts
  • period
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