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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Average distances in miles per person per year, by mode of travel. Write 150 words.

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Average distances in miles per person per year, by mode of travel. Write 150 words.
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The table provides key information about the changes in means of transportation in the UK between the years 1985 and 2000, with units measured in
miles
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 per person per year.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the total average
distance
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 rose over 15 years.
In addition
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, distances travelled by a person using Car, Local bus, Long
distance
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 bus, Train, orTaxi saw an increase, in 2000,
whereas
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 the distances by the other modes of travel decreased in the same year.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1985, the person travelled the longest
distance
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 using Car, at 3199
miles
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, and the second largest
distance
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 was by Other means of travel, Local bus, and Walking, at 450, 429, 255 respectively.
Conversely
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, Taxi and Bicycles accounted for the lowest ones, at 13 and 51
miles
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 respectively. In terms of 2000, there was a significant increase in the
distance
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 travelled using Car by 1607.
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, the
distance
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 by Train, Taxi, and Others soared by 77, 29,and 132
miles
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 respectively,
while
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 there was a considerable decline in the
distance
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 by Walking and Bicycles, at 237 and 41
miles
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words miles, distance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mode of travel
  • average distance
  • miles per person per year
  • significant increase/decrease
  • notable change
  • economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • public preferences
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental impact
  • urban development
  • rate of change
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