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This line graph illustrates the number of tourists who visited Caribbean islands between 2010 and 2018, measured in millions

This line graph illustrates the number of tourists who visited Caribbean islands between 2010 and 2018, measured in millions
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The line graphs present the
number
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 of visitors who visited the Caribbean islands between the years 2010 and 2017. The unit on the Y-axis is in
million
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.
According to
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 the picture, it can be seen that most tourists prefer to stay on the island until 2015,
then
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 they change their decision by staying on cruise ships during their visit.
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, the
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 of tourists increased from 2010 to 2017. In 2010 and 2011, the
number
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 of visitors who chose to stay on the islands accounted for nearly 0.7
million
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. There was a noticeable increase to roughly 1.3
million
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 by 2012
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 after that slightly increased by 0.2
million
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 in the next year and plateaued at 1.5
million
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 from 2013 to 2015. Fluctuating had been seen in 2016 and leveled off in 2017.
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, people roughly 0.2
million
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 decided to stay on cruise ships at the start of the period.
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, it shot up to 0.5
million
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 before slumping to the same
number
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 as in 2010 and back to the same
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 again at 0.5 in 2013. People staying on the ships after the year 2013 had become
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remarkable notice and reached a peak of 2
million
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 in 2017.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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