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apologize for damaging the product explain what happened say how are you going to fix the issue

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Dear Tracy , I am writing
this
 letter to let you know that the
book
i
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 have borrowed from you is lost now. I am really sorry that it happened to you  because I had to go on a trip without
a
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short notice 
due to
my
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 family matter. After the trip , I totally forgot your
book
 and was busy preparing for  my exams . It
suddently
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suddenly
 came to my mind that I just  remembered your 
book
. With no  hesitation , I hurried back to my house and started looking for your
book
. It has been 2 weeks  now and I could not find it anywhere in my house. I am really sorry that I lost your
book
. Please accept my apology . I will replace
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it with
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 a  new one for you. Now I am
ckecking
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checking
  with some
book shops
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bookshops
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.Since your
book
 was  limited
editions
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 and  published 10 years ago ,most of the shop is out of stock now. Luckily  one of the
book
shop
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 just
informs
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 me that he still has a copy of that
book
 but
unfortunately
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 he has to bring that
book
 from
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a diffreent
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diffreent
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different
 city. Please allow me some more time . I will  bring it to you once I receive the
book
 delivery . With best regards , Sandi
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structure
Try to structure your letter more coherently by using paragraphs to separate different sections, such as the introduction, the explanation of the event, the steps you are taking to rectify the issue, and your closing remarks.
transition
Incorporate transitional phrases to improve the flow from one idea to the next, which will enhance the overall coherence and cohesion of your letter.
grammar/spelling
Double-check your writing for any instances of spelling or grammatical errors to enhance clarity. For instance, 'short notice' instead of 'without a short notice', 'I suddenly remembered' instead of 'I just remembered', 'checking' instead of 'ckecking', and 'different' instead of 'diffreent'.
explanation
You provided a clear and detailed explanation of what happened, which helps in meeting the task achievement criteria.
tone
You have a polite tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for an apology, showing good task achievement.
initiative
Your effort to rectify the situation by finding a replacement shows responsibility and addresses the task's requirements.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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