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Band 4

Do you think that parents should restrict how much time a teenager spends on cellphone each day?

#parents #time #teenager #cellphone
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Children are the pillar of the future. Children are pliable
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 way so that they can lead a well-settled Lifestyle . Parenting is not a child's play . Parenting plays a significant role in
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 development. Some communities believe that
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. There is a range of conflicting arguments related to the assertion. I vehemently Accord to the assertion. In the succeeding monograph, I intend to delve into the rationale
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Structure
Expand your essay by providing body paragraphs that delve into the reasoning behind your standpoint and introduce examples or experiences to back up your views.
Conclusion
Integrate a conclusion that summarizes your arguments and reiterates your stance clearly, enhancing the completion of your response.
Balance
For a higher score, ensure you fully address the prompt by covering both sides of the argument if the question implies a discussion, even if you have a strong position.
Introduction
You have started with an engaging introduction that sets a clear outline of your essay’s direction.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dependence
  • Divergent views
  • Addiction
  • Promote
  • Physical activity
  • Minimize
  • Distractions
  • Rebellion
  • Educational benefits
  • Social benefits
  • Self-regulation
  • Balanced approach
  • Clear, reasonable limits
  • Responsible use
  • Mutual understanding
  • Autonomy
  • Foster
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