The bar graph represents the average monthly temperature in Lapland region in 2022. Analyze the fluctuations and identify any patterns or trends.

The bar graph represents the average monthly temperature in Lapland region in 2022. Analyze the fluctuations and identify any patterns or trends.
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The bar graph illustrates the mean temperature in the Lapland region over the course of twelve months in 2022.
Overall
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, it is obvious that the Lapland was under the freezing point for almost half of the year, between November and March, and the temperature was fluctuant around zero
degree
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Celsius. Meanwhile, there were only three months, from June to August,
that
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when
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the weather was slightly over ten
degrees
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.
In
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the beginning of the year, January was the coldest month, with -11.6
degrees
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Celsius, followed by February with
the
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a
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mean of -11.1
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.
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, the climate started to rise approximately 4 to 5
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in
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each month and went above zero from April onwards.
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, the hottest months
was
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were
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around 14-16
degrees
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during June and August,
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and peaked
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peaked
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in July
with
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at
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16.2
degrees
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. After that, the weather steadily dropped from September
,
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and went under zero in November.
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, the temperature reached -10.2
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in December.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words degrees with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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