Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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however
, when they meet anyone in person it becomes very difficult for them to communicate. Linking Words
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it keeps
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, maintaining relationships with your friends and relatives has been way easier now. Linking Words
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear and logical flow of ideas, which you have mostly achieved. Consider linking ideas more explicitly between sentences and paragraphs for even better clarity.
Task Achievement
You've responded to the prompt effectively, covering both sides of the debate and providing a reasoned opinion. For higher marks, further develop your ideas with more detailed examples and analysis.
Task Achievement
You've effectively introduced the topic, outlined both views, and provided a conclusion that reflects your own opinion, which demonstrates good task achievement.
Coherence & Cohesion
You have used a range of linking words to connect ideas within and across paragraphs, contributing to the coherence of your essay.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.