Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
The discourse surrounding social media has always been a part of
discussion
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the discussion
due to
its negative and positive effects on society. While
some contend that it has more negative effects on youth, debaters argue that it has some positive aspects such
as connecting people from all over the world. This
essay will discuss both the
viewpoints and will present my reasons to support the Correct article usage
apply
later
view.
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latter
To begin
with the former opinion, a group of individuals believes that social platforms like Facebook and Instagram leads
to adverse Change the verb form
lead
effect
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effects
such
as,
deficient communication skills and Remove the comma
apply
vulnerable
to choose Replace the word
vulnerability
wrong
path. Change the article
the wrong
In other words
, nowadays, children learn to chat with their friend
by typing with the help of their hands; Fix the agreement mistake
friends
however
, when they meet anyone in person it becomes very difficult for them to communicate. For example
, I belong to a joint family. When I was a child, we
were eight children in our family and we all were very talkative with our families and relatives, Correct pronoun usage
there
in contrast
, now we have six children in are
family, but they all are introverts they all Correct your spelling
our
keeps
chatting Correct subject-verb agreement
keep
on
their Change preposition
apply
phone
but never comes out of their room and talk with their family. Fix the agreement mistake
phones
Nevertheless
, when youngsters are unsupervised there is high
risk of falling for any e-scam.
Add an article
a high
On the other hand
, others and I believe that social networking has some perks such
as,
connecting globally and Remove the comma
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it keeps
you posted regarding current affairs. To explain, a person sitting in Japan can talk to a person living in Canada. Wrong verb form
keeping
Additionally
, maintaining relationships with your friends and relatives has been way easier now. For instance
, my mother lost touch with her friends, because her generation was not priviladge
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privileged
privilege
with
the facility of internet and social media, but I am still in contact with my school friend on Facebook. Change preposition
to
Also
, in previous decades the
news channels and Correct article usage
apply
newspaper
were the only Fix the agreement mistake
newspapers
option
to stay updated with global news, Change the noun form
options
however
, now Instagram and twitter
Capitalize word
Twitter
keeps
you posted with every single global Change the verb form
keep
crises
. Political scams are Change to a singular noun
crisis
also
reduced because of the fear of social media power.
To conclude
, I believe that, although
sites like Facebook and Twitter has
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have
few
drawbacks like lack of personal development and risk of choosing Correct article usage
a few
wrong
path, the advantages it has Change the article
the wrong
such
as connecting people from different countries and knowledge about current
situation Add an article
the current
is
beneficial for Correct subject-verb agreement
are
a
younger generation.Correct article usage
apply
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear and logical flow of ideas, which you have mostly achieved. Consider linking ideas more explicitly between sentences and paragraphs for even better clarity.
Task Achievement
You've responded to the prompt effectively, covering both sides of the debate and providing a reasoned opinion. For higher marks, further develop your ideas with more detailed examples and analysis.
Task Achievement
You've effectively introduced the topic, outlined both views, and provided a conclusion that reflects your own opinion, which demonstrates good task achievement.
Coherence & Cohesion
You have used a range of linking words to connect ideas within and across paragraphs, contributing to the coherence of your essay.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.