Some people think that governments should be responsible for carrying out and controlling scientific research rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
It is argued that some
people
think that government
should be responsible for carrying out and controlling scientific rather than private campanies
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companies
this
essay strongly agree with this
opinion because off the safety and for more protection to people
who work
into this
scientific research that include private information such
as medical and more ,firstly
there are many companies
that have geniuse
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genius
genuine
people
who work
to do research that helped the government
to succeed my suggestion would be that government
work
with private companies
to provide them with security staff and to keep them save however
the most important thing that people
should focus on is how they are keeping the research in save hands, secondly
companies
must ask the government
to do their researchers and provide them with the information when necessary, for example
some companies
works with their government
and provide them information about how their work
is going and assist them , in conclusion I strongly agree with this
opnion
and i think that it will help to improve the knowledge and support both areas together Correct your spelling
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- thirdly
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