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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The bar chart illustrates the different
of
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vehicles for
traveling
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travelling
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 and working in
the
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urban
of
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European
 areas during the period 1960, 1980, and 2000. It is noticeable that the highest
utilized
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 of transport in
one
European
 city
which
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was
Cars
 in 2000.
By contrast
, the lowest
number
 of vehicles was
bike
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bikes
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 in 2000 and
car
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cars
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 in 1960. In 1960, the citizens in
one
 urban area preferred to
use
foots
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feet
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 for travelling and working rather than using vehicles
such
 as Buses,
Cars
, and Bikes which were 35%, 20%, 8%, and 27%, respectively.
Furthermore
, In 1980, the majority of inhabitants in
one
European
 city used Buses for their activities approximately 27%.
Moreover
, the
number
 of residents who
use
cars
 for transportation skyrocketed from 8% to 25% but the
number
 of residents
use
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 bikes decreased to 23%. In 2000, almost all transport dropped which were 10% for Buses, 15% for Bikes, and 7% for foots.
On the other hand
, the
number
 of residents who
use
cars
 significantly increased to 37% which was the highest amount of transport for travelling and working in
one
European
 city.
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