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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The bar graph illustrates the number of
people
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 who choose to use
the
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a
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varieties
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variety
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 of transport to commute from their home to their workplace in one European
city
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, with 20 years interval from 1960 to 2000.
According to
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 the figure, it can be seen that a majority of
people
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 tend to walk to commute back and forth in the past.
However
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, cars become
a
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the
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 majority of transportation
mode
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 of
people
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 in the year later. Dwellers in the
city
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, in 1960, chose to travel by foot the most with about 35.
While
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, the bus became the main transportation
mode
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 which accounted for 27, almost the same amount
of
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as
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 the number of commuters using
the
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apply
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cars in that year. Eventually,
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the cars
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cars
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car
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mode
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were
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was
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 selected as the main
mode
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 of transport for
people
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 in the
city
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 and reached a peak at roughly 37.
On the other hand
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, transportation by
the
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car was not interesting for
city
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 dwellers, only at 7. The foot represented nearly 17 in the year 1980.
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, transport by bike dropped from the past in 2000, only at 7.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, city, mode with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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