The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

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The bar chart gives information about the number of

men

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and

women

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who were illiterate in 6 various

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last

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year. Units are measured in percentages.

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, what stands out from the graph is that the percentages of uneducated females were higher than males in all given

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last

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year.

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, in developed

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, residents were more educated as opposed to other

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. Looking into detail, regarding the small differences between genders, in developed

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less than 5% of both

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and

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were illiterate.

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, in Latin America, the illiteracy rates for

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and

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were almost the same at around 12%,

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in East Asia, the proportion for females was more than twice as much

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higher than that for males at 20% and 8%, respectively. In terms of big differences between rates, in Sub-Saharan Africa, the proportion of uneducated

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was just under 50%,

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the figure for

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was just above 30%. Meanwhile, in the remaining areas, illiteracy figures for females were around 55% for each,

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the figures for

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were just below 30% in Arab States and nearly 35% in South Asia.

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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

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