Many cities are currently facing a serious housing shortage. What are some of the reasons for this shortage and what solution can you suggest.
In recent years, a lot of towns have
trouble
with no Add a missing verb
had trouble
houses
to Use synonyms
send
Verb problem
apply
life
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live
.
Change preposition
in.
Although
the government in each Linking Words
cities
are tackling Change to a singular noun
city
this
problem, it is too far to solve from the current position. Linking Words
This
essay will be about why it occurs and my suggestion for it.
One of the reasons Linking Words
in
the Change preposition
for
less
Change the quantifier
fewer
houses
is that there are no territories to build them on the earth. It is said that there are more than Use synonyms
the
eight Correct article usage
apply
buillion ctitizens
around the world now and the Correct your spelling
billion citizens
it
number Correct pronoun usage
apply
would be
massive. In Wrong verb form
is
addtion
to Correct your spelling
addition
big
population, individuals are required to Correct article usage
a big
send
their Correct your spelling
spend
dailiy
lives with other creatures. The animals Correct your spelling
daily
also
would like to Linking Words
alive
in bigger places Correct your spelling
live
It is clear that
in order to solve Linking Words
housing
shortage, people have to expand the places to live in. Correct article usage
the housing
However
, it costs Linking Words
much
money and takes Correct quantifier usage
a lot of
long
time too much even though the number of people Change the article
a long
are
bigger and bigger. Developing new
Change the verb form
is
Additionally
, the Linking Words
lcak
of Correct your spelling
lack
architectures
relates to Fix the agreement mistake
architecture
cause
the shortage of Verb problem
apply
house
. The recent young tend to work at the offices. Physical jobs are likely to be hated by them Fix the agreement mistake
houses
due to
the trends. Linking Words
Fostoring
the builder of Correct your spelling
Fostering
house
must take Add an article
the house
a house
long
time and is not realistic Change the article
a long
on
the current Change preposition
in
sitution
that people want to live in as soon as possible.
To find a possibility to solve Correct your spelling
situation
serious
problem, I suggest Add an article
a serious
to renovate
the Change the verb form
renovating
used-house
no one living in. Correct your spelling
used house
That
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Houses
houses
are not essential to rebuild again Use synonyms
fron
Correct your spelling
from
the
scratch so costs are saved Correct article usage
apply
as a result
. Linking Words
Also
, it is said that the more growing the number of Linking Words
such
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houses
is, the more increasing Use synonyms
the
crime is Correct article usage
apply
stimulately
. Correct your spelling
stimulated
Therefore
the renovation of Linking Words
houses
would the city more comfortable to Use synonyms
send
lifeVerb problem
live
.
In conclusion, Change preposition
in.
from
my opinion, the government should Change the preposition
in
firstlyinvest
more money Correct your spelling
firstly invest
first invest
on
the changing inside of Change preposition
in
used-
Correct your spelling
used houses
houses
rather than on Use synonyms
expand
the Change the form of the verb
expanding
teritorries
or growing the Correct your spelling
territories
architectures
.Fix the agreement mistake
architecture
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