The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at lea
The pie chart provides information about travellers
of
four different continents who visit specific parts of Australia. Change preposition
from
On the other hand
, the table represents duration
of stay, where to habitat and most work they do. In total, Europe and Add an article
the duration
a duration
USA
had the biggest share of travellers and Correct article usage
the USA
also
had the most time of residence there. While
, sightseeing, swimming and surfing were tourists
hobbies.
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tourists'
tourist's
To begin
, about 70 per cent of people who come to this
part of Australia are from USA
and Europe and only one-tenth of them are Correct article usage
the USA
asian
. Almost, one-fifth are coming from other parts of the world.
Meanwhile, the table chart asserts that Change the capitalization
Asian
Asian
tends to stay just about 7 days. In contrast
, European and American
spent more time Fix the agreement mistake
Americans
approximatly
16 or 14 days. Other people have an average of 10 days Correct your spelling
approximately
residant
.
Another important item is about places they habitate during the journey. Correct your spelling
resident
While
most european
and other Correct your spelling
Europeans
continets
try Correct your spelling
countries
campings
or Fix the agreement mistake
camping
caravan
american and Fix the agreement mistake
caravans
asian
people show their tendencies to Change the capitalization
Asian
hotel
.
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hotels
Also
sightseeing is the most Add a comma
Also,
favorable
entertainment for Change the spelling
favourable
asian
and Change the capitalization
Asian
american
in Change the capitalization
American
spit
of the fact that Correct your spelling
spite
two
other groups prefer surfing and swimming or sunbathing.
To sum it up most Correct article usage
the two
travelers
are from Change the spelling
travellers
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the Us
Us
and Correct your spelling
US
europe
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Europe
whereas
, Correct determiner usage
these
this
two Fix the agreement mistake
these
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groups
group
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groups
saty
longer than others and significantly activities relating to Correct your spelling
stay
natur
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nature
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are
is
most Correct subject-verb agreement
are
intresting
for all Correct your spelling
interesting
gorups
.Correct your spelling
groups
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