The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at lea

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at lea
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The pie chart provides information about travellers
of
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from
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four different continents who visit specific parts of Australia.
On the other hand
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, the table represents
duration
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the duration
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of stay, where to habitat and most work they do. In total, Europe and
USA
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the USA
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had the biggest share of travellers and
also
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had the most time of residence there.
While
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, sightseeing, swimming and surfing were
tourists
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tourists'
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hobbies.
To begin
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, about 70 per cent of people who come to
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part of Australia are from
USA
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the USA
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and Europe and only one-tenth of them are
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asian
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Asian
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. Almost, one-fifth are coming from other parts of the world. Meanwhile, the table chart asserts that
Asian
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tends to stay just about 7 days.
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, European and
American
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Americans
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spent more time
approximatly
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approximately
16 or 14 days. Other people have an average of 10 days
residant
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resident
. Another important item is about places they habitate during the journey.
While
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most
european
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Europeans
and other
continets
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countries
try
campings
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camping
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or
caravan
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caravans
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american and
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asian
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Asian
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people show their tendencies to
hotel
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hotels
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.
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Also
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sightseeing is the most
favorable
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entertainment for
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asian
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Asian
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and
american
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in
spit
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spite
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of the fact that
two
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the two
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other groups prefer surfing and swimming or sunbathing. To sum it up most
travelers
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travellers
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are from
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the Us
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Us
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US
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and
europe
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Europe
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whereas
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,
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these
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this
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these
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two
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groups
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group
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groups
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saty
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stay
longer than others and significantly activities relating to
natur
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nature
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are
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is
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most
intresting
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interesting
for all
gorups
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groups
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words asian with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • holiday resort
  • demographic data
  • fluctuations
  • peak season
  • off-season
  • noticeable patterns
  • comparative language
  • correlations
  • trends
  • satisfaction ratings
  • dissect
  • recap
  • significent
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