In many countries the government likes to spend more money on arts some agree with this however other hand government should spend more on health and education discuss both and give your opinion.

Sectors like arts, health, education ,
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play a significant role in order to build a developed country . People
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the distinct mindset of the people. A colossal upsurge in the number of people who believe that
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spending money on
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. There is a range of conflicting arguments related to the assertion. In my view , I'm not fully Accord with the notion. In
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both sides but
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structure
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Introduce your topic, present arguments, then conclude by summarizing and stating your opinion clearly.
development
Focus on developing your points more fully. Each paragraph should contain a clear main idea and be expanded with specific examples and explanations.
balanced view
Ensure you provide a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument adequately before stating your opinion.
sentence structure
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grammar spelling
Check for grammar and spelling errors that could hinder understanding. Aim for accuracy in your writing.
task response
You have addressed the task by attempting to discuss both sides of the argument.
coherence cohesion
You demonstrated an ability to organize your ideas into paragraphs.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural preservation
  • Economic benefits
  • Promotes creativity
  • Foundational
  • Holistic development
  • Basic human rights
  • National welfare
  • Balanced approach
  • Tourism industry
  • Long-term
  • Prioritizing
  • Crucial
  • Neglect
  • Cultural identity
  • Mental health support
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