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You missed a flight due to a problem at the airport. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter: - describe what happened that caused you to miss the flight. - explain how missing your flight affected you. - make it clear what you would like the airline to do.

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Dear Sir or Madam, The reason why I am addressing you is that, I am going to tell
about
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 my missed on top of that, I crashed in the way when I was going to the airport
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, you should pay back my money. I was paid for the ticket. I am going to tell
about
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missed
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a missed
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 flight,
what
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and what
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has
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caused it. I got into a crash and I am in the hospital right now. I injured a lot. The missed flight affected
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me in the light
of
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,
I
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would go to
USA
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the USA
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 from my job. If I go here, It would
happened
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 an unprecedented felony.
Last
 year I went here and I have stolen a lot of essential documents. It became very useful for me. I would like to
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 from the airline when I get well, I would go to your airport
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, you should cash back my money.
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, I was
payed
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 that two months ago. If you do not pay back my money, I
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 give you to
police
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the police
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. I look forward to your answer, Yours faithfully, Cristiano Ronaldo.
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clarity
Ensure your letter is clear and concise. Avoid adding confusing or unrelated information to your explanation.
coherence
Consistency in storytelling will help in increasing coherence. Make sure each paragraph contributes to the overall message you're aiming to communicate.
tone
Maintaining a polite tone throughout your letter is crucial, even when making demands or expressing dissatisfaction.
task achievement
Be specific about the action you want from the airline and make sure it’s reasonable and clearly stated.
task initiation
You’ve successfully identified a need to communicate a specific issue with the airline, which is a good start.
closing
Your closing is polite and anticipates a response, which is appropriate for formal letters.
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