The chart shows information about the number of customers at three different restaurants during a five-day period. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the key features and make comparisons where relevant.
The ling graph illustrates the data about the number of customers
visited
three different shops Correct pronoun usage
who visited
such
as Mama
's Cafe
, Good Eats, and Tom
's Diner
in lost
five Verb problem
apply
day
. Change to a plural noun
days
Overall
, the Good Eats and Tom
's Diner
bost were popular in
Change preposition
on
day5
. Correct your spelling
day 5
However
Add a comma
However,
Tom
's Diner
was always a lost
Replace the word
loss
in
visitors
Change preposition
for
Firstly
, in
Change preposition
on
the
Correct article usage
apply
day
one, the number of custermers
in Correct your spelling
customers
there
Correct your spelling
their
restaurants
was Fix the agreement mistake
restaurant
Mama
's Cafe
become
Wrong verb form
became
nore
popular than another Correct your spelling
more
that
higher than 250 Change preposition
with
person
. Fix the agreement mistake
people
Whereas
in the
Correct article usage
apply
day
two this
situation was
changed. The Unnecessary verb
apply
visitors
who want Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
to
Change preposition
apply
Tom
's Diner
was increase
and more than Change the verb form
was increased
was increasing
Mama
's Cafe
becom
the most popular restaurant.
Correct your spelling
become
However
, Mama
's cafe
dramatically Capitalize word
Cafe
increase
in Wrong verb form
increased
number
of customers Change the article
a number
the number
Correct word choice
and become
become
again the most popular restaurants which around 250 people Wrong verb form
became
choose
Wrong verb form
choosing
it
but Correct pronoun usage
apply
in
Change preposition
on
day5
Correct your spelling
day 5
decrease
to 250 same Wrong verb form
decreased
which
Good Eats Correct word choice
as
in
Change preposition
on
day5
.Correct your spelling
day 5
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words mama, cafe, tom, diner, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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