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The chart shows information about the number of customers at three different restaurants during a five-day period. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the key features and make comparisons where relevant.

The ling graph illustrates the data about the number of customers
visited
Correct pronoun usage
who visited
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 three different shops
such
Linking Words
 as
Mama
Use synonyms
's
Cafe
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, Good Eats, and
Tom
Use synonyms
's
Diner
Use synonyms
 in
lost
Verb problem
apply
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five
Use synonyms
day
Change to a plural noun
days
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.
Overall
Linking Words
, the Good Eats and
Tom
Use synonyms
's
Diner
Use synonyms
 bost were popular
in
Change preposition
on
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day5
Correct your spelling
day 5
.
Linking Words
However
Add a comma
However,
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Tom
Use synonyms
's
Diner
Use synonyms
 was always a
lost
Replace the word
loss
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in
Change preposition
for
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 visitors
Firstly
Linking Words
,
in
Change preposition
on
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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day
Use synonyms
 one, the number of
custermers
Correct your spelling
customers
 in
there
Correct your spelling
their
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restaurants
Fix the agreement mistake
restaurant
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 was
Mama
Use synonyms
's
Cafe
Use synonyms
become
Wrong verb form
became
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nore
Correct your spelling
more
 popular than another
that
Change preposition
with
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 higher than 250
person
Fix the agreement mistake
people
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.
Whereas
Linking Words
 in
the
Correct article usage
apply
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day
Use synonyms
 two
this
Linking Words
 situation
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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changed. The
visitors
Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
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 who want
to
Change preposition
apply
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Tom
Use synonyms
's
Diner
Use synonyms
was increase
Change the verb form
was increased
was increasing
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 and more than
Mama
Use synonyms
's
Cafe
Use synonyms
becom
Correct your spelling
become
 the most popular restaurant.
However
Linking Words
,
Mama
Use synonyms
's
Use synonyms
cafe
Capitalize word
Cafe
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 dramatically
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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 in
number
Change the article
a number
the number
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 of customers
Correct word choice
and become
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become
Wrong verb form
became
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 again the most popular restaurants which around 250 people
choose
Wrong verb form
choosing
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it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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but
in
Change preposition
on
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day5
Correct your spelling
day 5
decrease
Wrong verb form
decreased
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 to 250 same
which
Correct word choice
as
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 Good Eats
in
Change preposition
on
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day5
Correct your spelling
day 5
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words mama, cafe, tom, diner, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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