The pie charts below show the sources for UK tax revenue for last year and the total UK government spending for last year.

The pie charts below show the sources for UK tax revenue for last year and the total UK government spending for last year.
The two pie charts demonstrate the variety of places
that
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where
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the
UK
taxes were collected and
overall
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the overall
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expenses of the
UK
government
. In total, national insurance and income
tax
provide almost half of the taxes
while
the
UK
government
uses huge
parts
of its money on education, pensions and health care.
To begin
, there are 8 sources for gaining
tax
and income
tax
is the biggest share with 28
percent
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.
Also
, value-added
tax
and national insurance have the next ranks.
In addition
, three
parts
of council
tax
, business rate and fuel duty are the least among all of them and they were only 5
percent
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per cent
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.
Moreover
, cooperation
tax
and other sources have about one-fifth of shares.
On the other hand
, the
UK
government
spent one-fifth of its income on pensions. Meanwhile, healthcare, education and welfare have quotes close to the pensions in percentages about 18, 14 and 17.
Furthermore
, four other
parts
like protection, transport etc. have the least investment on them. It is
noticable
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noticeable
notable
that about one-tenth of
incomes
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income
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uses
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for issues. In short, the
UK
government
have three huge and in total 8 origins for gaining
tax
whereas
,
in contrast
, spent its money on 10 different sections and
dedicate
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about 70
pecent
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per cent
of it to only 4
parts
.
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