The chart shows information about the number of customers at three different restaurants during a five-day period

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ling

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long

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graph illustrates the data about the

number

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of customers who visited three different shops

such

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Mama

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Cafe

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, Good Eats, and

Tom

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Diner

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lost

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five days.

Overall

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, the Good Eats and

Tom

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Diner

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bost were popular on

day

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However

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Tom

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Diner

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was always a loss for visitors

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, on

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one, the

number

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of customers in their restaurant

was

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Mama

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Cafe

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became more popular than another with

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than 250 people.

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day

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two

this

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situation changed. The

number

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of visitors who

want

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Tom

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Diner

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was

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increased and more than

Mama

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Cafe

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become

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the most popular restaurant.

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Mama

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Cafe

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dramatically increased in

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number

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of customers

became

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and became

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again the most popular

restaurants

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restaurant

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which

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with

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around 250 people choosing but on

day

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5 decreased to 250 same as Good Eats on

day

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Replace the words number, mama, cafe, tom, diner, day with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
6
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

137 words

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The chart shows information about the number of customers at three different restaurants during a five-day period

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Government investment in the visual arts, the kind you commonly see in art galleries, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think is this a positive or negative development?

Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think consumers are influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them?

People doing dangerous sports activities like scuba diving and bungi jumping, they should be responsible for their own life and rescue workers should not risk their lives to save people. Do you agree or disagree?