The chart shows information about the number of customers at three different restaurants during a five-day period
The
ling
graph illustrates the data about the Correct your spelling
long
number
of customers who visited three different shops such
as Mama
's Cafe
, Good Eats, and Tom
's Diner
in lost
five days. Verb problem
apply
Overall
, the Good Eats and Tom
's Diner
bost were popular on day
5. However
, Tom
's Diner
was always a loss for visitors
Firstly
, on day
one, the number
of customers in their restaurant was
Unnecessary verb
apply
Mama
's Cafe
became more popular than another with higher
than 250 people. Correct word choice
more
Whereas
in
Change preposition
on
day
two this
situation changed. The number
of visitors who want
Wrong verb form
wanted
Tom
's Diner
was
increased and more than Unnecessary verb
apply
Mama
's Cafe
become
the most popular restaurant.
Wrong verb form
became
However
, Mama
's Cafe
dramatically increased in a
Correct article usage
the
number
of customers became
again the most popular Correct word choice
and became
restaurants
Fix the agreement mistake
restaurant
which
around 250 people choosing but on Correct your spelling
with
day
5 decreased to 250 same as Good Eats on day
5.Submitted by jcafe2177 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, mama, cafe, tom, diner, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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