Computers and A.I technology are increasinglybeing used for online education. Can artifical intelligence enhance the learning experience? Is this a positive and negative development?

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In recent years, A.I and computers have widely been used for learners to learn online as they enhance
students
' experience with various entertainment and information sources.
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writer believes that
this
is a positive development
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because
students
are flexible to
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their
study schedules. One reason
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to be considered is
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that aritifical
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artificial
intelligence
support
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students
with their essays and tasks.
Due to
the wide network, people are able to use it for their questions and topics.
This
helps them to finish their work quickly and have more time on other subjects.
Moreover
, not only
students
but
also
teachers find it useful. Using digital gadgets and modern
equipments
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, they can design beautiful and interesting lessons for
students
, which may attract them and the lessons less boring and dull.
As a result
,
students
enjoy the classes and focus more on them so that they are able to pass the exams easily.
According to
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research in Canada, a primary school used 3D glasses to help children understand
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wildlife and nature. Most of them said that it was exciting and started having
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this
field. It needs to be understood that AI helps
students
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their study timetable. Because individuals can access
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at
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, it is convenient for those who need to learn at unsocial hours.
Students
are able to search for their necessary and extra materials, which is difficult to do
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with our
without
computers. They do not depend on their teachers but can understand their knowledge,
in other words
, it takes less time to learn and
students
can put more
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on
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their fields and
weakness
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. Taking Japan as an example, teenagers still learn well by using AI despite spending much time on school clubs. Taking all into
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, computers and artificial intelligence enhance the learning experience.
Hence
, they have positive impacts on
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students
because of giving flexible study schedules.

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Task Achievement
You provided clear and relevant examples, such as the use of 3D glasses in Canadian schools and how AI assists Japanese teenagers. This strongly supports your argument.
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