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In the 21st century humans prefer to talk on social media and think it is the best way to meet. From my point of view, despite it disposal of the host of offline meetings it is able to save a large amount of time for humans.

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In the 21st
century
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 humans prefer to talk on social media and think it is the best way to meet. From my point of view, despite
it
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 disposal of the host of offline
meetings
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meetings,
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 it is able to save a large amount of time for humans. Nowadays, we are living in a world where is technology developed enough for a generation who wants to communicate without leaving their home.
Also
, people think it separates us from the word view. Siting only at home and connecting our life with the internet easily able to
limit
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 us because, if a person connects his life with only
Internet
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the Internet
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 he may be not able to process without electricity or
thing
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which depend on
Internet
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the Internet
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. Mainly it makes a person dependent. For example, the research of scientists proves that, if individuals
siting
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 in their comfort zone and limit their lives to online networks their horizons will not expand. Despite, the all negatives
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 online residence it can help
for
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a host of individuals with disabilities work at
the
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home and earn money.
In addition
, to
this
, it is useful for busy persons to save time because they may be capable of finishing work in their location and deal many projects with abroad companies. What is more, it may be useful and protect much of aliveness.
For instance
, in 2019 we faced to virus which spread by air
for
this
 reason many educational systems used
such
 kinds of zooms and continued study. On top of it saves much aliveness.
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, there are a lot of advantages than negatives. From my point of view
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bad communication can not be the reason for limiting us from the media.
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