The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same period.
The column graph compares the
number
of people who visited before and after the renovation to
Change preposition
of
Ashdown
Museum, Correct article usage
the Ashdown
while
the given
pie charts represent separately the results of surveys about visitor satisfaction Verb problem
apply
in
Change preposition
apply
the
before and end of the Correct article usage
apply
restoration
.
Looking from an overall
perspective, the number
of visitors
to Ashdown Museum rose after the restoration
. It could be noticed that the proportion of visitors
` satisfaction strongly grew while
their dissatisfaction was deteriorating
after the Wrong verb form
deteriorated
restoration
.
Getting back to the details that
the Correct word choice
apply
number
of visitors
reached 92.000 after the restoration
, even though there were 74.000 before the restoration
.
Now, turning to the details in the pie charts that the number
of visitors
who were very satisfied and satisfied went up by three times, which previously was 25%, and hit three-quarters later. Whilst the total number
of dissatisfied visitors
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
initially
by half, the number
of these visitors
dropped a fifth later. It is clear from the pie charts that in both periods, 5 % of visitors
did not respond to the survey.Submitted by sabinanezar93 on
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