Older generation often hold some traditional ideas on the correct way of life, thoughts and behavior. Most people argue that it is not helpful for younger generations to prepare for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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been referenced thousands of times inarguably to imply that the older
generations
have better
ideas
and experience in comparison with the
millenials
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millennials
. I find
this
idea relatively controversial and would disagree with it to a greater extent. The Older
generations
, inarguably, bring
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abundance of experience in the way of living life and various perspectives of life and these traditional
ideas
are highly beneficial to traditional lifestyles and challenges but may not be equally effective to the modern way of living. As
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time brings in waves of changes and new sets of challenges, technological challenges
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instance, the orthodox strategies might be redundant and irrelevant. A
modern day
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lifestyle is technology-driven, ultimately leading to numerous psychological issues which can never be addressed
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traditional ways as these issues are very specific to the current technological
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era
and never existed before. Another very common example, a very debatable one, is people's conflicting
ideas
about
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relationships. The Older
generations
always believed that one should marry and spend their
lives
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with the best match fixed by the family but the
21st century
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generation believes in trying out the compatibility with the prospective candidate before locking in
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life-long relationship, which seems quite
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too. In conclusion, the
ideas
and thoughts of older
generations
might still be relevant when it comes to learning with experiences and struggles but they may not be worthy of implementing when trying to address the modern way of living and the troubles that come
along with
it.
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